"You said what?"
"I love her Amy," Dave repeated. "I'm leaving you and the kids."
I couldn't believe what I was hearing. As if I was paralysed, I watched Dave pick up his travelling bag and walk out, closing the front door quietly. I hated that. I wished he had slammed the door. That would have given me some sense of finality.
I crumpled in a heap.
(c) TP 2009
I hate it when marriages break up, but sadly, with the way we rush in, is it any wonder that we rush out as well?
ReplyDeleteYou definitely got me hooked!!! Great start
ReplyDeleteHmmm, the decision to leave was (definitely) not an on the spot one. 'twas allowed to breed slowly (& progressively) by the day.
ReplyDeleteNice read...hey thanks for stopping by!
ReplyDeleteI love this. Is it part of something you are working on?
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comments everyone!
ReplyDelete@Nnamdi: It was an experiment to write something under 100 words :)
beautiful..short but spoke volumes..hope u got an A+
ReplyDeleteThis is short but it speaks volume of surprise heart ache and rejection
ReplyDeleteThis is really good !
ReplyDeletewow!! pretty good, i felt it
ReplyDeleteA snapshot of a moment in time with all the pungency of heartbreak and a parting. Well done.
ReplyDeletemore than 100 words can be used to describe how awesome that story was. great read!
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