tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post1487114546737892896..comments2024-02-08T19:52:49.763+00:00Comments on On Writing and Life: Short Story - RegretsFavoured Girlhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06799796628809329966noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-84804404637562946532011-01-22T19:49:35.920+00:002011-01-22T19:49:35.920+00:00Hello, thats an interesting story. I guess we all ...Hello, thats an interesting story. I guess we all have missed a good chance to do what we regret now, but im sure you havent really waste your time. Its just a feeling you have :)<br />Im startin my new blog adventure in English and see whats out there.<br />Hugs :)Romek Dubczekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10231290787000004680noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-23425783109925471812010-03-27T22:26:19.655+00:002010-03-27T22:26:19.655+00:00Well, that's life (especially for writers)Well, that's life (especially for writers)Jacob Heperthttp://www.schieldenver.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-15379593495037381892010-02-06T02:10:45.410+00:002010-02-06T02:10:45.410+00:00I see your intent in this story and I am beginning...I see your intent in this story and I am beginning to form an idea about what you aim for in a story. <br /><br />I was drawn into the story from the beginning until I got to the very end where I was expecting something more: maybe a twist in the tale OR a SINGLE COMMENT from Margaret that would perhaps EXPLICITLY answer John's question about wanting another copy of coffee and at the same time IMPLICITLY address the sense of loss of a life she could have had if her choices had been different: a SINGLE statement into which the rest of the story would dovetail into.<br /><br />A beautiful work all the same. Well done.Eyitemi Egwuenuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11052179254104034961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-21222946616515510102009-11-24T13:36:11.603+00:002009-11-24T13:36:11.603+00:00babe, na wa, you don MIA no be small.
Well, take ...babe, na wa, you don MIA no be small.<br /><br />Well, take care.<br /><br /><a href="http://nigeriancuriosity.com" rel="nofollow">NIGERIAN CURIOSITY</a><br /><a href="http://solomonsydelle.com" rel="nofollow">IT WAS SO MUCH EASIER WHEN I ONLY HAD ONE...</a>SOLOMONSYDELLEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17564768670896215900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-34300012071331438412009-09-24T12:26:19.693+01:002009-09-24T12:26:19.693+01:00Cool...but...Don't always expect the construct...Cool...but...Don't always expect the constructive criticism always. It's nice i have someone i can flex my skill with...let's share ideas.idrisworldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17105252774430171377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-55084200643955875892009-07-10T14:42:34.440+01:002009-07-10T14:42:34.440+01:00mmm dat's deep choices choices but maybe had u...mmm dat's deep choices choices but maybe had u chosen to play violin other blessings would not have come through in ur life u know..<br />Regrets are not good friends to our soul sista..ans as someone said its not too late:)Yayemariehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07930431992598228126noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-222706999068046432009-04-07T20:36:00.000+01:002009-04-07T20:36:00.000+01:00Hellooo???You ok hon???Hellooo???You ok hon???ShonaVixenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03745455482846320144noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-47592295612405156182009-04-01T01:04:00.000+01:002009-04-01T01:04:00.000+01:00Really good. is this part of your novel..cos its e...Really good. is this part of your novel..cos its engaging. You might want to be on the lookout for tehuse of certain words...." pasting " a smile is ok but something more along the line of "forcing a smile" might sound better. just wanted to let you knowSweetnothin'https://www.blogger.com/profile/07201367008326060865noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-78321729584363884892009-02-23T03:29:00.000+00:002009-02-23T03:29:00.000+00:00I like this short piece very much. It contains an ...I like this short piece very much. It contains an important message. <BR/><BR/>Are you done with it or are we to expect another?Osondu Nnamdi Awarakahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00828719217990670598noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-39982169498249677942009-02-22T15:52:00.000+00:002009-02-22T15:52:00.000+00:00Just checking in...Just checking in...SOLOMONSYDELLEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17564768670896215900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-14091238943455568302009-02-05T12:22:00.000+00:002009-02-05T12:22:00.000+00:00C’est la vie…C’est la vie…NoLimithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03879937849991946112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-87766674240426271452009-02-04T22:09:00.000+00:002009-02-04T22:09:00.000+00:00nice. are we to expect any more fiction? and this ...nice. are we to expect any more fiction? and this was fiction, right?SOLOMONSYDELLEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17564768670896215900noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-34794876608994049942009-02-04T19:08:00.000+00:002009-02-04T19:08:00.000+00:00nice work!It's never too late to learn to play an...nice work!<BR/><BR/>It's never too late to learn to play an instrument.<BR/><BR/>you should definitely start thinking of getting published.The poets voice ~~~https://www.blogger.com/profile/11838504853046762542noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-35537640.post-55010508715973106732009-02-04T17:35:00.000+00:002009-02-04T17:35:00.000+00:00It's good. your craft is showing. the time you've ...It's good. your craft is showing. the time you've spent honing it<BR/>there's a typo<BR/>"<BR/>I too could have been playing the violin at impressive concert venues too,"<BR/>well, tautology<BR/><BR/>it's written to appear almost effortless<BR/><BR/>One problem is that you state things explicitly. That works in non-fiction but may turn a reader away.<BR/>I think you need to imply things more.<BR/><BR/>the key thing is<BR/>the reader wants to do some work<BR/>the reader wants to unravel some aspect of the story<BR/>if you remove the parts of this flash fiction that explicitly told us about Margaret's past life in music<BR/>the story would be stronger.<BR/><BR/>Good work tho'!Icepickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08055884346817797269noreply@blogger.com